They were in a Coffee shop when all of a sudden *BING* their phones all went off, it was a message from Jimmy, the dad that commit suicide, turns out he didn’t commit suicide, he was adultnapped by the guy who threatened to kill his kids. Lily and Billy, (Lily & Billy are twins) Katie (Mom) & Ella (Oldest child) had no idea what was happening so Bob had to explain it all down to every last detail. Lily & Billy are the real troublemakers of the family and they do literally everything together, then we have Ella who loves to dance and has a celebrity crush “Shawn Mendes” who she is utterly obsessed with. Katie is a professional baker and is a chef who has her own recipes that have made millions. Jimmy was the mayor of Christchurch City but now that role has gone onto his brother, there is something not right about him, he’s always taking private phone calls and the choices he makes are only his decisions when they should be reflected on his community.
They went home the next day because the first day they were too afraid to go home in case the person
Great Job Sahana!!!
ReplyDeleteI didn't like but I lOVED what you detail you use in the story the start of the story made me really hooked in
in the story I think that you could use more onomatopoeia because thats what made me want to read the rest at the start and then I think that it got a tiny bit boring at the end
I Loved your story and I really want to read the rest